Monday, June 21, 2010

Your Own, My Own: A Poem

Do you mind if I steal your first kiss?

If I take it away and make it my own?

Love you forever and never let you go?

I always got lost in your eyes,

Your smile always brighter than the sun,

And your hair and the wind always were one.

Is it selfish if you want the same?

If you know the truth, but do not speak,

You wish not to be broken-hearted again and to seem weak?

We are soul mates,


Whispering careless thoughts into each other’s ears.

Flowers were no comparison,

The clearest lakes couldn’t match your eyes of blue,

And the red lips of roses cannot kiss me like your kisses do.

The clock’s pendulum swings and I age,

Yet you remain the beauty, you remain the same,

Who should you or I blame?

Do you mind if I amend,

By letting you kiss me and hold my hand until the very end?

But this time you make my last, your own.

“I will never leave you alone.”

At what age did you get your first kiss? Have you found your soul mate? Is there such a thing as a happy ending?


Janet Johnson said...

Sweet poem. I was 23. :) Definitely found my soul mate. No happy endings, because I don't believe in endings . . . happy middles? I'll have to think of a better name.

Anonymous said...

Beautiful poem! :]

I do believe there's such a thing as a happy ending, because I've seen it. But I myself have found nowhere near a soul-mate. Not to be depressing, though. xD

Vatche said...

Hey, Janet, glad to hear that you found your soul mate and that there is no ending to your happiness. I like the idea of happy middles, that's a great name for it actually.

Write on and love on!

Vatche said...

I'm glad you enjoyed the poem, Amanda. :D

It's cool that you've witnessed happy endings, I've witness some, as well. I'm sure your soul mate is somewhere out there, lost without you. He is searching for you just as much as you're searching for him.

Write on, search on, and love on!

Shadow said...

so dreamy.... first kiss? 13. soul mate? don't like the term. happy ending? absolutely!!!

Elisabeth said...

So poignant, Vachte. I love the opening words, the opening line...Do you mind?

The romantic query letter and the happy-ever-after said...

Here I like it and here is why. You have bleed on parchment with your romantic hope and there is no greater expression for me. Saying enough to offer heart and holding on to the bit that protects dignity, well done sir.

Now for your questions:
1. I was 12 years old and more curious than infatuated.
2. No, not yet.
3. I feel life is too complex for a happy ending but I do believe one can choose to be happy with another to the end.

Warm regards,

Anonymous said...

I don't remember when I received my first kiss. So it must not have been anything worthy. Certainly this poem is beautiful and heartfelt. I'm a sucker for love poetry :) Still waiting on my "soul mate". Happy endings? Yeah I still believe in them. If there is sorrow then there must be joy somewhere.

Vatche said...

Hey, Shadow, glad to see your comment here, since you're a beautiful poet, it's really an honor. I'm glad you liked it enough to comment. :D

I don't like the term soul mate either; something about the term sounds a bit off to me. I'll try finding a better way of explaining it...

As for happy endings, I can only hope for people to have happy endings.

Write on and love on!

Vatche said...

Hello, Elisabeth! I'm glad you enjoyed the poem!

As for the first few lines, they've been haunting me this entire weekend until I wrote them down on a piece of paper.

Maybe the lines will somehow develop into a full-blown story?

Those characters of mine and whispering strange thoughts and ideas into my ears.

Anyway, write on and love on!

Lydia Kang said...

Lovely poem!
I think there are happy endings. But they're not all castles and clouds, gold and perfection. It's about contentment between the suffering, and happiness within the confines of our imperfect world.
Thanks for following my blog!

Vatche said...

Hello, Simone! I think I'm evolving with my poetry writing gradually and it's getting better with every poem I write. I try to put all my passion into a single word, which is the art of poetry really. Thank you for your kind words and awesome thoughts.

When I got my first kiss, I was also more curious, I believe, than infatuated. As for finding your soul mate, I hope you find him someday, I'm sure he is also looking for you. And I also believe in happy endings, because I've witnessed them in front of my eyes.

Write on and love on, Simone!

Vatche said...

Hey, Owning the Words!I'm sure your first kiss is somewhere deep in your consciousness, you just got to remember it.

Thank you for calling my poem "beautiful and heartfelt", even though I still have a lot to learn about poetry. I think I can also admit that I'm a sucker for love poetry as well, but I think most people are, so we're not the only ones. :D

I think your soul mate is looking for you, too. It's good that you still believe in happy endings; it's always good to believe. You're right about there being both sorrow and joy in the world, the yin and the yang. There must be a balance.

Anyway, write on and love on!

Vatche said...

Hey, Lydia! I'm thrilled that you enjoyed the poem. You're right that happy endings aren't all "castles and clouds, gold and perfection," but they are more modernized. They aren't perfect, like Owning the Words said in a few comments above, she said that there is sorrow and joy in the world. There is a balance.

You're welcome on following your blog! It looked awesome, so I decided to become a follower. Thank you for returning the favor and write on!

The Words Crafter said...

Wow, that's a really great piece of writing! Hello, don't know how in the world you found me but welcome to my blog! Hmmm...I was about 19 and many years later I found my soul mate-we've been married 9 years, together for about 11-we started out as great about you?

Wild Rose said...

Lovely poem :)

WritingNut said...

Beautiful poem Vatche, very stirring :)

Vatche said...

Wow! Thank you, The Words Crafter.

Your blog seemed interesting so I decided to follow it, that's how I found it!

I have yet to find my soul mate, but I'm still young (18 years old), so I still have time. No worries.

Write on and love on!

Vatche said...

Hey, Wild Rose, thank you for your comment! I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. :D

Vatche said...

I'm so glad that you thought the poem was beautiful, WritingNut, and also very stirring. May it continue to stir you in the future!

Write on!

Anonymous said...

am i the only one that found "happy ending" funny? haha of course they're real, but they cost extra.


Vatche said...

Interesting thought, Rafi, I wonder how much a "happy ending" costs nowadays and if it's tax deductible.

Anonymous said...

no, its not.


Vatche said...

Damn, and here I was thinking it was. Thanks for the heads-up, Rafi!

Terresa said...

My first real kiss was at age 13, I think.

Yes, I found my soul mate. We were 18 when we met, now, 20 years later and 4 kids betwee us, we are still together.

Happy endings? I think so, but also many mountains to climb...

PS: Loved this romantic poem. Esp the lines, "The clearest lakes couldn’t match your eyes of blue."

PPS: Thanks for your complement on my blog. Poetry is addicting, isn't it?

Vatche said...

Hey, Terresa!

Yes, poetry is addicting at times, sometimes I can't stop with it and go back onto prose writing.

I'm glad you love the poem and put your two cents in the bank of the Mind. That's amazing how you found your soul mate at the age of 18, I hope to be just as lucky. As for mountains to climb, you couldn't be more right.

Write on and no problemo on the comment for your blog, you completely deserve it! :D

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